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[color="green"]well, yeah i know..im writing again <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/blum.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':P\' /> prepare yourselves for another emotionally charged song

ok, motivation behind song: its written from a girls perspective ok? so dont say theres typos, and dont question my sexuality, its been written to be performed by a female <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... igwink.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\';)\' />

its about a girl that is rejected by her boyfriend, for whatever reason. but she hasnt got over it like he has, she still loves him...etc anyways, enough with the boring intro, here it is

STYLE: slow acoustic (vewwy emo) [/color]

[quote name=\'Second is just first loser\']Im wondering, what’s there to find
Im sick of all, our pushy fights.
Im wondering how, ill ever love
When you slapped my face, with your white glove.
I loved you so dear, I held you so tight.
You held me till I went to sleep at night.
I loved you I did my love was so bare.
You made me promise, you made me swear.
Now all of a sudden, it seems you don’t care.

I need him, I want him, I miss him, and I lust for him, why!
I don’t want to love anymore, cant bear the weight that it brings
But so what? You made me happy, I know.
I thought you loved me, I thought it was true. Then you said, to hell with you.

I thought you were different, I thought you were sweet
I though you could make my world complete.
I thought when you looked into my eyes
You really could see who that person was,
See how that person felt about you, why that person felt so empty without you
But instead you brushed me off, like nothing
That person lives now, anything but free
That person, that person was me.

I need him, I want him, I miss him, and I lust for him, why!
I don’t want to love anymore, cant bear the weight that it brings
But so what? You made me happy, I know.
I thought you loved me, I thought it was true. Then you said, to hell with you.
I thought you loved me, I thought it was true. Then you said, to hell with you.
I thought you loved me. Well you know what? To hell with you!

[size=0]Copyright James Vercoe And SvD 2005[/size][/quote]

another piece well done, verczeh....a few changes I would make, but it's more of a personal style than grammatical...although there are a few phrases which could be worded a bit differently to ease the flow. <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... /smile.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':)\' />

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[color=\"green\"]its still only a rough draft type piece..we'll make changes as we work on it but..yeah

cmon, lets hear your suggestions <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/blum.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':P\' /> [/color]

[color=\"green\"]*cough* bumpage/reminderage *cough* [/color]

very nice vercz` <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/good.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\'(Y)\' /> , wish i could write like that