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[quote]Forever worth but a word or two
Never returned the time still gone
Always distant, never there
Still travel, never reach
I'll never know why I'm still here

Sunset shows but few colors
Stars still shine the same
Never a flower that didn't die
Moonlight dim, and passes by
Sky touch just out of reach
I'll never know why I'm still here

Memories made just fade away
Never tried to have the time
Always just gone from me
Colors will dull eventually
A word escapes you, but only one
I'll never know why I'm still here

Stand so strong with no real motive
Shine so bright without a light
Fire in your eyes weakens in time
Life's agitaion and I vanish
Stream of passion just passes by
I'll never know why I'm still here

Passage presses upon the shallow
Road still lost, I'm still hollow
Beckon in the lifeless night
Take direction in such fights
Sweep away your agony, but leave mine there
I'll never know why I'm still here

If I leave there is no barrier
Still I'll stay with no reason
I'm here in my devastation
Obstruction of being, complications in you
Blind is my mind from all the years
I'll never know why I'm still here[/quote]

Yeah, I titled it "This Place"

This is a poem about the determination of some people I've met in sports:

[quote]You pierce me with your sad soar eyes
Torment lay deep within your soul
Trial so passionate with sick abandon
Why are you still trying?

Surrender yourself for but one goal
Discipline with no boundries found
Full hourglass with but one waste
Why are you still trying?

Heroic defines your every step
Fear of not but yeilding
Inspired by only intuition
Why are you still trying?

Shut down by the very command
Start again but the same demand
Anxious from but a choice
Why are you still trying?

Divine in stance and still in mind
Torture presses on as you lay still
Meditation musing your very determination
Why are you still trying?

I'll never know why you're still here
I'll never know why you're still trying

I'll never know why you're still my hero
I'll never be the same with you there[/quote]

I don't think anybody's reading these, but those are the only two for a while I think.

I do.. I just don't comment on literature. I don't think I have enough knowledge in that area to even begin commenting about it. <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... igwink.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\';)\' />

There are a few things I would change in the first one, simply for the metre but otherwise, it is very good as it is, and as I commented on DA about your second one, very, very well done.

I will usually read literary contributions a few times before I comment on them, and it may take me a few days because I have to be in the right mindset to do so <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... /smile.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':)\' />