How Could You?

[Electrix]

Would you still love me if I loved myself less
If I stopped trying to fix this mess
That I've let myself become
The darkest of all scum
That will never wash away
But will soon start to decay
Away my insides
Where the lie hides
Where I wont let you get to
Where I wont let you break through
Would you still love me if I hurt myself more
All the while still trying to find out what its all for
While you patiently wait for me to take a stand
But I let it slip through my fingers like sand
Like all the memories I not longer want
But continuously haunt
Me and remind me of everything I had
That made me happy but now make me sad
That I burned up into ashes
As the time slowly passes
Would you still love me if I finally broke down
While I was swimming in my tears and started to drown
But never took a hold of your hand in fear
That I'd drag you down and pull you too near
So that you would start to drown too
And there was nothing I could do
All because I pulled you in
And I couldn't win
The battle inside
Because I never really tried
Would you still love me then after all of that
Would you still hold me close and refer to me as your cat
Would you continue to wipe away my tears
Would you continue to help me battle all my fears
Would you ever decide it was too much for you
Would you ever decide to leave me too
Or would you still love me the way you do now
And if you would I'd like to know...how?

[Tami]

Well written, Electrix. A couple of suggestions if I may. The use of punctuation would help your poem flow better, as would editting how some of the lines read. For example:

Would you still love me
If I loved myself less?
If I stopped trying
To fix this mess
I've let myself become?
The darkest of all scum
That will never wash away,
But will soon start to decay
And dimish my insides.
The lie hides inward
Where I wont let you go,
Where I wont let you break through
Would you still love me
If I hurt myself more?
All the while still trying
To find what it's all for.
You patiently wait
For me to take a stand;
Instead I let it slip
From my fingers like sand

[Shydragonchic]

<img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/good.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\'(Y)\' /> <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/good.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\'(Y)\' /> Two thumbs up from the peanut gallery

[Electrix]

I suck with punctuation lol, Ill try better nest time <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/blum.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':P\' /> thanks shy and ada =)